קטע כתיבה באנגלית, מה דעתכם?

סורי אם יש טעויות אנגלית לא שפת אם.
הקטע לא בא לפגוע ו/או להעליב אף אחד.

Boys to men,
born innocence,
and live to ruin that.
Boys to men,
were once just like anyother human,
until bullshit got into their heads.
Boys to men,
once knew to respect their mom
but they didn't know what dad made her do at night.
Men to boys,
and that's when the world
was fair enough,
to make everyone die,
with hope.