אני חייבת עזרה באנגלית דחוף רק מי שיודע (כתיבה)

Use the example attached and the tips for how to write a paragraph in which you describe an object.
Your writing will be graded.
Language - did I use the correct tense, did I write sentences by the basic structure of SVO?
Vocabulary - did I use the correct words? can I use better ones?
Punctuation- Did I use CAPITAL letters at the beginning of sentences? did I put a comma (פסיק) and a period in the right places?
structure - do I have an opening sentence and a topic sentence? do I have at least 3 examples? did I finish writing the paragraph with a closing sentence
אני צריכה לרשום משפט על חפץ