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Ella cried next to her mom's bed on the hospital , her mom's red hair was grey and sick. Then she heard her mom's voice "Ella" it was her first word after a three months, three months without her mom's wise advices or her funny jokes "yes mom?" Ella asked, she was afraid, afraid to lose her mom "Ella I need you to promise something for me, I don't have a lot of time between the people who alive"she said "everything for you mom" Ella knew her mom doesn't has a lot of time, The doctors said that she may not survive the day, dad was really trying to prepare Ella to this, but after all she is just a young girl.
"Ella i want u to promise me that you go in right way" and then she fell in sleep, at least that what Ella thought that was happening, -bip-bip-bip-bip- Ella heard the device next to her mom, one minute later her dad and three doctors came into the room, "she is losing oxygen" one of the doctors said "she can't breathe!" The other said in panic -bip-bip-bip-bip- the device was still doing the annoying noise. "We are sorry, she is gone" it was the other doctor.
Ella and her dad was crying and then Ella started to smile "dad why are we crying? Why are we sad?" Her dad just looked at her confused "we should be happy, happy because we are the luckiest people in the world, we need to be happy for the time she WAS in here, for the time we were with her, we need to appreciate that she was our family ".