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me and my family went out to play*
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there was a heavy snow in jerusalem when i was 7 years old.
me and my family went outside to play with the snow.
i was jumping on the snow and suddenly i saw a little mountain that was made from the snow on the trees.
so i decided to climb on the little mountain.
after a few minutes i saw that my leg got stuck between the branches.
so i shouted for my big brother to come and help me so he came and
pulled my leg out but my boot remained inside the snow.

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