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הייתי משנה את "with my special spaceship" ל-"using my special spaceship".
"we finally arrived, after 5 minutes" -> "after 5 minutes we finally arrived"
"which* i used to go to when i was a child*"
הייתי גם משנה את "and then, when the blue sun set down, i got down on my knees and asked her if she wants to marry me."
ל-"then, following the stunning blue sunset, i lied down on my knees and proposed to her."
"well she said yes, i was so excited! and from then, we live happily ever after. we have children and grandchildren; i will never forget that vacation." ->
"she said yes, my excitement was unreal! we lived happily ever after and had children and grandchildren. i will never forget that vacation."
"we finally arrived, after 5 minutes" -> "after 5 minutes we finally arrived"
"which* i used to go to when i was a child*"
הייתי גם משנה את "and then, when the blue sun set down, i got down on my knees and asked her if she wants to marry me."
ל-"then, following the stunning blue sunset, i lied down on my knees and proposed to her."
"well she said yes, i was so excited! and from then, we live happily ever after. we have children and grandchildren; i will never forget that vacation." ->
"she said yes, my excitement was unreal! we lived happily ever after and had children and grandchildren. i will never forget that vacation."
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תודהה
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בבקשה. שימי לב שאת נוטה להשתמש הרבה ב then ו and then, מה שלא נחוץ באנגלית ומוריד מהרמה של הטקסט. נסי למצוא מילות קישור אחרות.
שואל השאלה:
סבבה
סבבה
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