תקשיבו עזרה דחוף

כתבתי קטע כתיבה באנגלית בעבר אתם יכולים להגיד לי אם הוא טוב?
I want to tell you about a special event I had my uncle's wedding.
The wedding was at pomegranate gardens when I got to the wedding picture taken with all the family together, and then began to arrive and the buffet opens. Right after the buffet and the canopy went to eat and after dinner dancing started I went to dance together with my family and the bride.
The finish l really enjoyed dance and I had fun and I was glad my uncle married.