אפשר דעה לגבי השיר שכתבתי?

פתיח
בית:
Tonight the stars are all shining
Towards you
Too bad you're not here

Tomorrow the sun will rise for you
But you're nowhere to be seen
מעבר:
Oh baby oh baby
I love your laugh
But now its a memory

So bad you left me
Now you cannot hear
My song
That i wrote
פתיח
פזמון:
I hope the best
And i hope that you'll see
That im doing better than that
I love you my baby
But you'll never hear from me ever again
You take it upon yourself.
בית שני
Everyone tells me that I was wrong
For falling in love
But they won't understand this feeling
When you have something that's worth waking up
מעבר:
Oh baby oh baby
I loved your smile
But now i can't remember
Your name
Same as always
Again and again

פזמון:
I hope the best
And i hope that you'll see
That im doing better than that

I love you my baby
But you'll never hear from me ever again
You take it upon yourself.
פתיח:
סיומת
goodbye forever
My beautiful
Pink blonde girl.
Goodbye forever
The one that got away.