מישהו יכול לבדוק לי חיבור שכתבתי ( מודל g)?

הנושא הוא מה אני חושבת שחשוב יותר מזל טוב או החלטות טובות.
There are people that believe that good luck it more important in life than good decisions. I personally think that good decisions its more important in life than good luck.

Firstly, the good decisions that we make in our life is in our hands, and our good luck not always. and thats why our good decisions is more important than good luck, because we have control on it
unlike luck that we can't always control it.

Secondly, sometimes,our good decisions can affect our good luck. Because if we will make a good decision about something in our life,it can lead to the fact that the things that will happen
after that in our life in this matter, will be good.

To sum up, I think that good decisions it is a more important thing then good luck because that can lead us to make a good luck to ourself and it also something that we always have a control on it, unlike good luck that we are not always have control on that