דחוף עזרה באנגלית זה טוב הפסקה הזאת? ואם לא אז מה לתקן ? דחוף !!

Hi, My name is Adi Goren. I live on 22 Meir Baal Haness Street in Tel Aviv , Israel. I go to Mordei Hagetaot School. My favorite colors are green and blue. My Favorite food is pasta in tomato sauce . My hobbies are cooking , dancing and painting. My Favorite hobby is dancing . I usually dance on Mondays, Wednesdays and Thursdays. I love ballet the most because I dance ballet with special shoes called "point shoes". I have mom, uncles, cousins and grandparents. I dont have any brothers or sisters, but my cousins are like brothers to me.
Adi, 12